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*ahem*
wow.....its a bit messy but good try nonetheless
You put
| Quote: | | Skywalker was on a planet with lyn corak do a mission for the jedi councal.'How will we get out of this on Anakin 'said lyn.'Idon't know lyn' then suddely a pack of warrious come out of know where . |
I would have put
| Quote: | Anakin Skywalker was on a planet with fellow jedi Lyn Korak. They were sent to this specific planet for a mission they did not know yet.
" How will we get out of this ", asked Lyn
" I don't know ", replied Anakin
In less than a heartbeat warriors of unkown origin were suddenly bearing down on the weary jedi. |
Thats how I would have put it. Then again I would give more background story as to the mission and not just pop into action with no idea who these characters are and what predicament they are in.
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