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Posted: Sat Dec 17, 2005 7:46 am
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Obi-Tyler Council Member in Absentia Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 3983 Location: LA,USA Ok I'm just saying though. Like in Clone Wars Volume 2 Mace Windu shows us this trick by landing on a droid starfighter, slicing its circuitry, and then finally using the wires to control the droid. Their was never a cockpit. But with you saying that scavengers cleared out the head of the droid starfighter that makes more since. _________________

Posted: Sat Dec 17, 2005 4:52 pm
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Padawan_Hurgot Jedi Knight - 4th Degree Joined: 11 Dec 2005 Posts: 793 Location: In a Galaxy Far Far Away... Also what I don't get is how it is an unpowered craft and yet it continues to fly along at extremely fast speeds? But it is still an AWESOME story. You should finish it then repost the entire story. _________________ "there is no spoone" - The Matricks

Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2005 12:22 am
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Rive Caedo Jedi Grand Master Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 8294 Location: Kallibann It's not flying at all, it's falling Coruscant is built vertically. The fighter has fallen from the mid-levels (Just below the level where the Jedi Temple/Senate is) and continues to fall, now into the underworld of Coruscant. Falling like a bucket down a well Hopefully I'll have time to write another section soon. _________________ May The Force Be With Us, Always

Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2005 8:47 pm
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Rive Caedo Jedi Grand Master Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 8294 Location: Kallibann Quote: The fighter continued to freefall into the undercity. Rive got his bearings back and reached for the flight controls under instinct... All the emergancy matienance controls had been stolen from the droid fighter of course, along with any power source for them. Dim lights from cheap glow-rods that illuminate the lowest levels of Coruscant zip by as Rive and the fighter continue to accelerate downward. A sudden idea comes to Rive and he pulls his hold-out blaster from his sleeve and plugs the Fighter's emergancy power supply cable directly into the blaster's power-pack. Cables all around Rive start to spark and a wailing proximity alarm starts to go off. Due to safety proticals hard-wired into the fighter it immediatly fires off the thrusters in its underbelly that had not been stolen. It begins to decellerate to a stop... Not nearly quickly enough however. The fighter slams into an Underworld street, smashing its wings apart and crushing most of the frame. After a brief moment of pain, all goes to darkness around Rive and he feels nothing. _________________ May The Force Be With Us, Always

Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2005 10:40 pm
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Padawan_Hurgot Jedi Knight - 4th Degree Joined: 11 Dec 2005 Posts: 793 Location: In a Galaxy Far Far Away... Very nice. good anticipation and suspense build-up. I'm on the edge of my seat plz don't stop. _________________ "there is no spoone" - The Matricks

Posted: Sat Jan 21, 2006 3:41 am
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Rive Caedo Jedi Grand Master Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 8294 Location: Kallibann Woah an update? How strange! Quote: "It was hardly worth even dragging out here" A raspy voice accompanied by a ringing tone... "Yeah... Too bad, why do you figure tha..." A deep voice with the same ringing tone along with it... Rive blacked out again. "Hey buddy! Wake up!" it was the small raspy voice again. Rive steadily came to but couldn't see a thing, the raspy voice started up again almost before he could worry the explosion had blinded him. "You got a pretty nasty gash across your face, had ta bandage ya up" Rive's head was still spinning and he could hardly seem to focus on the words... "Um... Tanks... Tanks... Thanks" The deeper voice laughed from the corner, "Top-dwellers can't handle a bit of spice eh?" "What?" Rive still couldn't focus The raspy voice was behind him now, "We don't have any fancy medical supplies down here, had ta slip you some glitterstim to shut down your system long enough to get you patched up... What were you doing in a scrapmetal confed ship anyway?" "Well I was... Glitterstim?" The raspy voice was clanking around some metal as he responded, "Yeah, you used to be able to get it prescription top-side, called it kodatain or something? Eh B'ruk?" The deep voice grunted in agreement from the corner, "Heck of a drug, kills pain, knocks ya out, and even puts you into a bit of a calm healing state. Still don't know why they banned it a few years back. " Rive's breathing started to come in gasps as he felt his lungs close up "Oh yeah, side-effects" The raspy voice said to the deep voice... B'ruk's great amusement, "Don't worry kid, they'll die down in a few hours, we had to give you a pretty big dose. Try to get some more rest." Blinded by bandages, barely able to breathe anymore, and a bit of a spasm running through his arm... Rive didn't think he was in any position to argue and drifted into a spice-induced nap. _________________ May The Force Be With Us, Always

Posted: Sat Jan 21, 2006 4:00 am
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Lyn Korak Jedi Council Member Joined: 19 Dec 2005 Posts: 9034 Location: Hopefully RPing again soon This is so cool Rive. Keep going. _________________ Take the Magic: The Gathering 'What Color Are You?' Quiz.

Posted: Sat Jan 21, 2006 8:53 pm
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Padawan_Hurgot Jedi Knight - 4th Degree Joined: 11 Dec 2005 Posts: 793 Location: In a Galaxy Far Far Away... An intresting twist I Like! _________________ "there is no spoone" - The Matricks

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 7:47 am
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The Chosen One Jedi Master - Veteran Joined: 20 Dec 2005 Posts: 3855 Location: Florida Just a question Rive since you decided to rip my story a new one, how could a blaster cell repower an entire star fighter? Seems unlikely to me. _________________

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 7:19 pm
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Rive Caedo Jedi Grand Master Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 8294 Location: Kallibann That's mentioned in the next part. I suppose I'll write it now. You're right that perhaps it wouldn't have been able to power it at all, but I personally figured it could at least partially power what's left of the fighter (Remember that the thing has been almost entirely gutted, the weapons are gone, the main engines, the droid brain, etc etc etc. There's not much left to power) for about 4 seconds. So for me, that's not really the problem. But would a droid fighter's emergancy power supply cable even be able to attach to a blaster power pack? That's the real issue I thought of, but I wrote it up to artistic license _________________ May The Force Be With Us, Always

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 8:48 pm
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The Chosen One Jedi Master - Veteran Joined: 20 Dec 2005 Posts: 3855 Location: Florida Rive Caedo wrote: That's mentioned in the next part. I suppose I'll write it now. You're right that perhaps it wouldn't have been able to power it at all, but I personally figured it could at least partially power what's left of the fighter (Remember that the thing has been almost entirely gutted, the weapons are gone, the main engines, the droid brain, etc etc etc. There's not much left to power) for about 4 seconds. So for me, that's not really the problem. But would a droid fighter's emergancy power supply cable even be able to attach to a blaster power pack? That's the real issue I thought of, but I wrote it up to artistic license Well then that deserves an applause. Good thinking on your toes _________________

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 9:31 pm
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Xander Vos Sith Emperor Joined: 08 Jan 2006 Posts: 19752 Location: The Sith Temple Well, I too have a question: If this is Rive's journal, wouldn't the story take place in first person? _________________ Time to start again.

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 9:46 pm
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Rive Caedo Jedi Grand Master Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 8294 Location: Kallibann Because "From the Biography of Rive Caedo" doesn't have the same ring to it? I suppose I could change it to "From the travels..." or such... _________________ May The Force Be With Us, Always

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2006 12:16 am
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The Chosen One Jedi Master - Veteran Joined: 20 Dec 2005 Posts: 3855 Location: Florida Xander Vos wrote: Well, I too have a question: If this is Rive's journal, wouldn't the story take place in first person? Quote: jour·nal A periodical presenting articles on a particular subject It could be someone else recording Rives tales of granduer, and glory _________________

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2006 12:20 am
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Rive Caedo Jedi Grand Master Joined: 02 Dec 2005 Posts: 8294 Location: Kallibann Quote: It could be someone else recording Rives tales of granduer, and glory Ah! The same idea as the Star Wars movies being "From the journal of the Whills". I'm not sure about glory though, since all Rive has currently done is hid like a coward in a fighter, fell down a hole, and gone into a drug-induced nap _________________ May The Force Be With Us, Always

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