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 PostPosted: Tue May 02, 2006 8:27 pm Reply with quote  
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  Shatterpoint
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Darth Minious wrote:
ONly problem is that in my story you and Saber are of vasty different ages, with her being in her forties and you in your eighties twards the end.


Dang it, thats unfortunate, though I don't see how I can fix it now without turning the whole story into something different. Crying or Very sad
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Nice job, I like it.
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 PostPosted: Tue May 02, 2006 9:50 pm Reply with quote  
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The two stories don't to necessarily have correspond with eachother, really.
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Just like roleplays Razz

I thought the story was really good. I didn't really comment at all as you updated it, but I really liked the discription you included.

Great Job!
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Yeah but if she is mentioning things from Minious' fanfiction, and his is part of the Sith continuity, which I think it is, then to have them connect all elements would have to fit, unless it became a Splinter of the Mind's eye thing, where parts are incorperated, and others are dropped.
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Part of the 7th chapter, will finish it soon
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Davith We glanced at the door as Adi left. He was in incredible agony, nearly his whole body was in devastating pain. I can’t believe I injured so badly by just a little girl, even though she has one of the highest midichlorian counts ever recorded, he silently berated himself. He rubbed his head gingerly, wincing as he found a large bruise on the back of his head. I’ll have to thank her for such lovely bruises. He carefully laid back further on the sleepcouch, trying to prevent as much pain as possible. I’m sure Adi will sort this out, he thought as he fell asleep.
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Adi Gallia pulled her comlink out as she quickly made her way towards the Jedi Council Chamber. She spoke hastily into it.

“ Asil, your friend Davith We has been injured badly by Akiva in a practice duel. He is in the medical center now if you would like to see him.”

Asil gasped. “ Is he alright?” she asked, concern evident in her tone.

“ He is bruised badly, has a sprained wrist and a concussion at best, but there may be other injuries that I am not yet aware of.” Adi replied.

“Thank you for informing me Master.”

Adi cut the communication as she reached the door to the Jedi Council Chamber. She tooka minute to compose herself before requesting to enter.

The door hissed open before her. She took a deep breath then began to enter.

I have a feeling that I’m going to be in here for quite awhile, she thought, as the door closed behind her.
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Yayness. Good chapter.

I want more. Is that all I get for reading that ENTIRE Johnny thing? Now, come on. Very Happy
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 PostPosted: Sat May 06, 2006 4:38 am Reply with quote  
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Darth Saber wrote:
Yayness. Good chapter.

I want more. Is that all I get for reading that ENTIRE Johnny thing? Now, come on. Very Happy


Thats only part of the chapter, the rest has yet to be written.
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Well, I read the ENTIRE other Johnny thing. And even looked at the pictures without you asking..! I deserve the other half of the chapter. Very Happy
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Nice chapter. Very Happy

Keep it ip.
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 PostPosted: Sat May 06, 2006 5:21 am Reply with quote  
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Darth Saber wrote:
Well, I read the ENTIRE other Johnny thing. And even looked at the pictures without you asking..! I deserve the other half of the chapter. Very Happy


Lol, good Kasey* pats head* , I'll try to finish the chapter tomorrow sometime.
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Moo. Razz

Good. Very Happy You know? I have failed to torture you lately, it's been you who has been doing all of it, lol.
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Nice job, I wish they were a bit longer though.
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SkywalkerAndVader wrote:
Nice job, I wish they were a bit longer though.


Lol, once again I must point out this chapter is not finished yet. Laughing
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post more or :ahh: TIM



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