The Legacy of Kor

Darth Kor · The Legacy of Kor

This is the story of how Kor came to be.(sorry in advance for any spelling errors Sad

)It was a normal day on the planet of Coresant. When a small baby found its way to the Jedi temple. A name appered on the cradle. It said Sinned Nalnuig. He was quite happy there until after only 5 days of living in the temple, he was kidnapped. The Sith had led an invasion on the temple. Failing to do so they fled, stealing the young child on their way out. There they raised him to be one of them. Sinned never felt at home with the sith but for all he knew it was his home. Then after 21 years while on a search and destroy mission, he found out that he did not belong with the sith. He was in shock. Sinned tried to hide his emotions, but when that failed, he fled. He had to make sure the sith would never find him he had to change his name. He had found out that his adopted sith father had been a Knight Of Reaven. So he changed his name to KOR.

Xander Vos

That is really good, but you need to fleash it out more. You tell your entire tale in one paragraph when look at, SkywalkerAndVader's stories, for just one example. They go on for pages. You see what I mean? I like the actual story though. Very Happy

Darth Kor

Thanks, it's a work in progress. I'm not done yet. Cool

So without any further interruptions, let's get back to the story....

Grand Vizier Tarna

Nice, Dennis. I mean Kor Wink

Darth Kor

The journey to the jedi temple was long and dangerous.(Especially since Kor didn't know how to fly yet) It took some doing but he managed to land safely on Tatooine. It was not where he intended to end up, but that is all Kor could do on the ammount of supplies left on the ship. "First things first,"Kor said, "I'm going to need some new clothes and fresh supplies for my ship." So Kor traveled into the vast wasteland trying to find even an ounce of civilization.

Darth Kor

Kor was walking in the desert for 6 days, eating anything that he could find. Then finally he found a town. He looked around trying to find anyone who would be kind enough to help him. Then he came upon a small shop near the edge of town. There Kor found a man who thought he ruled the galaxy. "Oh my god this guy is a nut," Kor said to himself. After a long conversation the man he finally agreed to help Kor. So the man gave Kor some new clothes and some fresh supplies for his ship. He even gave Kor a ride to his ship. Later Kor found out that the man had stolen 50 credits from his pocket. But he decided to leave the man alone. (that was because he had stolen those 50 credits from the man) Still Kor had no idea where he was going. He couldn't ask the locals for directions because he didn't know any other languages besides English. Kor was also frightened that the Sith would hunt him down."So now I must find a navigator, an interperator, and a body guard," Kor said. Where he would find them, that is a story for another day.

Jaden Nightsaber

You should try and condence the posts instead of posting one after another.

Darth Kor

Ok. Thanks for the tip.

Darth Kor

"So where will I find a body guard?" Kor said to himself as he roamed the galaxy. Finally after much thought he decided to try his luck on the lava planet Mustafa. When Kor landed on Mustafa it was everything but a warm welcome. Guards came rushing in and took him hostage. After many hours of being unconscience Kor woke up in a dimmly lit dungeon. As he looked around him he saw the remains of those who lost their lives to whoener captured them. "So I see you are another guest of His Magesty Darth Sirch," said a raspy but strong voice that seemed to come from nowhere. Kor not knowing what else to do walked around the room examing every detail of the gloomy prison that kept him out of reach with any sort of life. Kor walked and looked until he came upon a strong looking man crouched on the ground. "Greetings friend," the man said, "My name is Palas." Kor told Palas his name and asked about their capture. "Little is known about this strange Sith but what I do know is that he took over this Planet like it was a mindless antfarm," replied Palas. Kor looking stern and confident said to the man "I'll make you a deal, if I can get us both free will you be my body guard and come with me to the Jedi Temple?" Palas then said "If you can do that then I would do anything you want!" Kor knew that this was easier said then done.

Darth Kor

Kor and Palas sat crouched together trying to come up with an escape plan. They were interrupted by one of the guards who announced that they were both sentenced to be executed when the sun sets. That only gave Kor and Palas 5 minutes to escape. They had to think fast. Then Kor got a brilliant plan. So they waited until sundown. When two guards came to drag them to their doom, Kor and Palas laid on the ground motionless. Each guard went closer to check them out and when they got within arms reach they reached out, grabbed the guards by the head, and knocked them unconscious. Then they took the guards uniforms and placed them over their normal clothes. They then tried to sneak out to their ship. “We’re almost there.” Palas whispered softly. Kor thought that for once something might go as planned. But of course he was wrong. Three guards saw through their disguises and quickly apprehended them. They were brought to a long ramp situated directly over a boiling lake of lava. As they stood in silence a dark, shadowy figure emerged from the crowd of guards. Kor knew at once that this was Darth Sirch. As he spoke Kor could see his eyes turn into a burning inferno “So gentlemen I shall give you a choice right now, you can either swear your allegiance to me, or you can die. Take your pick.” Kor just stood there motionless for a minute then spit in Darth Sirch’s face. “Fine, then you chose death!” Sirch said, “Lower them into the lava.” Then one of the guards spoke out “But sir we usually hang anyone who has been here over 10 days.” Then another guard spoke out “No, we hang them by their toenail and whip them.” Soon the whole place was in an uproar. Kor took this as a chance to escape but not before getting some revenge. So while Darth Sirch was turned around Kor Force Pushed him into the lava and then took of running. When Kor and Palas finally reached the ship Palas said “Does this ship have a name?” “No,” Kor replied. So they talked it out and decided to name it The Destiny Voyage. As they took off from that lava planet Kor said to himself “One down, two to go.”

Darth Kor

Kor and Palas were completely lost. Without a navigator it was only sheer luck that Kor found Mustafa. But before they could get a navigator they would need an interpreter to help them understand the native language of any planet they happened to land on. They have been roaming the galaxy for days trying to find a nearby planet. During the time Palas told Kor of all the adventures he had had. It turns out that Palas had once been a Sith himself. But when the empire left him to die in the harsh deserts of Tatooin, Palas swore that he would never let any man share his fate. Palas had agreed to escort Kor to the Jedi Temple. But the route there was unknown to him. So they roamed around searching for a nearby planet. Kor needed a rest from sailing so when he saw the planet of Tatooin he once again landed. But this time he made sure he landed closer to town this time. As they walked into the city of Mois Eisley they saw posters that showed an extremely high bounty on both of their heads. “So, they left you to die in the desert?!” Kor said accusingly. “Okay, maybe I committed treason first. But at least I’m not the only one!” Palas said. They bickered and argued for quite some time until they realized that they were just attracting attention to themselves. So Kor and Palas slipped into a nearby bar to lose the attention of any nearby Bounty Hunters. They sat down at a table next to what appeared to be a woman. Kor whispered to her “Listen, if you pretend that we’re with you then I promise to give you 50 credits in exchange.” The woman (who Kor now found out was actually a man dressed as a woman to escape some ruffians who had tried to murder him just recently) looking extremely disgusted told Kor that his name was Shar. Kor had asked Shar if he knew of anyone who could speak foreign languages. “Well maybe I could be of service. I have been to every planet in the known galaxy. I can speak fluently every language that has ever been spoken.” Shar said. “Then, you’re hired.” Kor whispered trying not to draw attention to himself. But then 5 Bounty Hunters walked through the door. “There he is,” said the first. “And there is the other,” said the second. Kor and Palas quickly grabbed Shar and took off running toward the ship. Without a moments hesitation they quickly took off and flew as fast as they could. With the bounty hunters hot on their tail they landed on Naboo. As they where landing Palas noticed that the Bounty Hunters seemed to let them go. It was as if it were part of their plan. What fate could possibly await them on Naboo? Only time will tell.

Grand Vizier Tarna

Kor, what did I say at lunch yesterday?

Microsoft Word!
-Write longer chapters
-Spell and grammer check

Darth Kor

Yeah I did that! The auto correct must be shut off.

My bad Embarassed

Grand Vizier Tarna

There is no auto-correct. You have to manually do spell check.

And chill, no need to get offended Very Happy

Xander Vos

And what he means is write two, maybe three page chapters on Word, then post it here. All your chapters seem to have been posted maybe twenty minustes apart, which means that you posted one, then immediately wrote the second.

Lyn Korak

The last chapters have been on:

Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2006 4:34 pm
Posted: Tue Dec 19, 2006 4:52 pm
Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 8:33 am

It's the other ones.

Xander Vos

Yeah, thats what I meant.

Darth Kor

Don't worry Tarna I wasn't offended.

And I don't know what verzion of word you have but my verzion does have an auto correct system. I've looked. Cool

And now if there are no more interruptions I would like to get back to my story....

Xander Vos

Then that's bad, because if you type a Star Wars word, it'll automatically correct it into an English word.

Darth Kor

Yeah I just figured that out.

And Now back to my story...

Darth Kor

As the trio landed on Naboo they were quickly engulfed in a cloud of darkness. “I don’t like the look of this place.” Shar whispered softly. Even though none of them were very fond of the quiet, eerie aroma of Naboo but they had no choice. It was either land and have a chance of survival, or get blown to pieces by the Bounty Hunters that awaited them just outside Naboo’s atmosphere. When they stepped out into the cool, crisp air Kor felt that something didn’t feel right. Suddenly they were ambushed. Sith and Bounty Hunters were all over them. Soon they were locked up in chains. At closer inspection it turned out that the people who Kor thought were Sith were actually Dark Jedi. Kor, Palas, and Shar all stood in defiant silence. The leader of the group stepped forward. He told them that they would be delivered to the Sith so they could collect the bounty on Kor and Palas’s heads. “ Well,” said Palas, “any brilliant escape plan this time?” Kor quickly replied “I’m working on it.”

Xander Vos

As I said to you, write it in word, size 12 font, and write perhaps a 2, 3, maybe even 4 page chapters, THEN post.

Darth Shadow

I like it. It's Dan Brown-ish. Try adding some more detail and you've got it.

Xander Vos

Even Dan Brown's chapters were longer than that.

Darth Shadow

Darth Kor

Ok, more details, and longer more abundent chapters.
Got it. Thanks. Very Happy

Darth Kor

As Kor, Palas, and Shar were escorted into the dark abyss of the prison hold Kor couldn’t help thinking that it was all over. He was so close. His perfect team was almost assembled. But now it was too late. They were in the hands of experienced Dark Jedi. They were way more experienced than he was. As Kor sat on the cold, damp floor of the prison hold it seemed like all hope was lost. He was beat, there was no denying it. As the foulest stench surrounded him twisting and tangling his senses he knew he would not be conscience much longer. As he saw the expression on his comrades faces he knew they were feeling the same thing. This was it the moment of truth. He had to think of something fast or the curtains would close on his adventure. “Guys,” Kor whispered softly, “I can’t think of any way we could get out of here. And this leaking room isn’t helping me either.” Wait! That was it! He reached down at his side and…. Darn! Those damn Dark Jedi had taken his light saber. The only thing he had was a small knife he kept hidden in the sole of his boot. “It will have to do.” Kor said. So Kor told Palas to get down on all fours so he could reach the ceiling. Palas understood his plan and did as he was told. Kor stood on his back and looked at the ceiling. There! Right in the center of the ceiling was a hole large enough to fit his head through. Luckily this particular prison hold was very very old and was worn away by rust. So taking his knife Kor sawed away at the rusted ceiling until the hole was large enough to fit through. As Kor crawled through the hole in the ceiling he went over to the drivers and slit their throats. He looked around for a while and then finally found his light saber in the belt of one of the drivers. Soon after Palas and Shar caught up with him. Palas took over the wheel and Kor went further into the back and found another pilot tied up. Kor untied him and the pilot quickly thanked him. But before Kor could find out his name Palas yelled, “Kor we’ve got trouble!”

Kisuk Kolar

It's good just try to separate it into more paragraphs

Darth Kor

When Kor reached the front of the moving prison hold to see what the problem was what he saw was a sight to behold. In every direction there was what seemed to be an endless mass of soldiers. There rifles were pointed straight at the trio’s heads. It was inevitable. They were done for. This time there was no way out. It was either do what they say, or die! They needed to think of something. Anything to get them out of this nightmare.
Their ship was only a short run from the very back of the prison hold. But even to get to there without getting shot would be a miracle. Kor looked up into the sky and saw a whole fleet of ships just waiting to shoot down anything that moves. “It would take an expert pilot to maneuver around those ships,” Kor said to himself. Then Kor got a brilliant idea. He ran back to the pilot and asked him if he could maneuver around those ships. “Sure,” he said, “ but why should I help you?” Kor was growing impatient so he took out his light saber and held it against the pilot’s neck ready to strike at any moment. “ And why,” Kor said, “ should I let you live?” The pilot gulped, and seemed to get the point.
So the pilot agreed to Kor’s terms and told him of a secret hatch that was right underneath the floor of the room they were in now. Kor called Palas and Shar and the four of them snuck through the hatch and were soon at the back of the ship. They waited there until the soldiers charged onto the prison hold. Then when the soldiers were all near the front of the ship Kor, Palas, Shar, and the pilot ran for the safety of their ship. When they were all inside Shar said “ That was a close one.” They all nodded in agreement.

With everyone in their places they began to take off. The pilot (who has now been identified as Zaren Vaporlus) steered the ship slowly at first then the ships speed got faster and faster until they were zooming by the other ships before they even got a chance to blink. As they left Naboo’s atmosphere they left with the final member of the team Kor needed to get him to the Jedi temple. But as Kor thought about what was happening and what has happened he knew it would be hard to give it all up. He had the perfect team. They could conquer the galaxy and rule it the way they wanted to. Kor pushed these thoughts from his mind and he knew that it would be harder to give up the Dark Side than he had thought.
They were zooming through the galaxy at top speed now making the occasional stop for fuel and supplies. As they grew closer to their destination it seemed clear to everyone that Kor had changed. He was no longer the eager, tactful young lad he had been. He had grown more self serving and has stolen quite a bit of pricey items. His temper had grown and the rest of the gang knew that if they were to live the lives they wanted to they would have to let him go.

Darth Kor

This is the final chapter on this subject( Sad

) so I decided to write it separatly.

With each passing day they grew closer to the Jedi temple. And as the days passed Kor grew more greedy and more corrupt. So while Kor was asleep Palas, Shar, and Zaren held a secret meeting to discuss what should be done about Kor. After many hours of bickering they decided that they would bring him to his desired planet but they would put him in an uninhabited are with no civilization for miles. The next morning everything was quiet. Kor came up on the bridge and saw no one. He grew suspicious. He sensed something was amiss. Suddenly, he was grabbed from behind, bond, gagged, and stuffed inside an escape pod. Kor was infuriated. Those traitors! How could they do this to him! The escape pod was launched and Kor was sent hurtling toward the ground. The next thing that Kor heard was a crash! He untied himself and stepped out into the bright sunlight. Kor could still see his ship just outside the planets atmosphere. They were flying away in his ship HIS ship! This was unbelievable.
Kor swore that one day he would get even with them. He couldn’t think of any reason why they would do this to him. But then as Kor looked at his reflection he did not know the person staring back at him. Actually he did know who that was. That was the face of Sinned Nalnuig. The Sith that at one time had his own plans of ruling the galaxy.
He knew what he had become and vowed never to go back to that path. So now with a new outlook on life Kor began his slow but steady walk to the Jedi temple.

Darth Kor

Okay since I'm too lazy to make a new topic I'll just write on this one.
Now I was a little vauge about me leaving the Sith so I'm going to elaberate on that a bit.

It was late in the afternoon. Kor had just come back from a big mission. He had just slaughtered his first Jedi. It was a great moment for him. So to celebrate some of Kor’s friends(who where outsiders like him) decided to go out for a drink. While Kor’s friends where drunk they told Kor that the Jedi really didn’t kill his parents. Kor found out that night that the Sith kidnapped him and that his parents may still be alive. So, completely enraged (and drunk) Kor went up to one of the higher ranking Sith whipped out his light saber and cut off his right arm. Soon a whole bunch of Sith were on top of Kor before he could think. As punishment his right arm was supposed to be cut off but Kor’s friends pleaded that he was drunk and he didn’t know what he was doing. The Sith took this into consideration and lowered Kor’s sentence. Kor was to have a Sith tattoo put on his right arm to remind him of his place. So after what seemed like an eternity of agonizing pain the tattoo was finally finished. Now a tattoo of a burning flame surrounded Kor’s entire right arm. The deed was done and the mark was set. Kor was now furious so once he was released he murdered everyone in that room.
Then Kor fled. He was only 20 at the time and had no where to go. Kor stowed away on one of the ships and launched an escape pod to nearby planet. When Kor stepped out into the great unknown he had no idea of what he would find. But nothing could prepare him for what he was about to witness.

Kisuk Kolar

still seems too short. Try to break it into paragraphs

Darth Kor

it was getting REALLY late so I had to cut it short. But my next post will have longer chapters. (just as long as I don't write them at 12:00 at night)