Darth Tygr
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New story of Darth RevanIn a instant he wakes up as he feels he was pulled through at warp speed but without a ship. He falls forward through a emerald green casket in the shape of a diamond. His senses floods back as well as his memories...............Bastilla.................Canderous.................HK47..........Malak..............his mission in unkown space. He sees a small mirror as he looks over at the mirror and is horrified at what he sees. His body is tattoed and carved his flesh is anything but smooth his pain is constant and everywhere on his body. He hears footsteps as he sees another of the "warriors" as the warrior demands what he is doing and He responds in the warrior's tongue"I AM REVAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" as Revan says this the entire room is filled with electricity as Revan uses his body and the pain inflicted upon it as a conduct as Force storm explodes in the room destroying the warrior to dust and the surrounding guards of the room. Revan goes and heads to a door and places a hand on the door as Revan uses the force to open it to gather the cloak and robes he wore 5000 years ago when he chartered to the Unkown territorties so long ago. Once Revan is finally dressed he moves through the corridor using the information that was implanted in his head of his location of this base. Soon Revan is confronted by ten more warriors as he is weaponless except he IS THE WEAPON Revan uses Force Storm, Kill and Scream to defeat the opposition before he could reach to the next room. Blood or some sort of liquid lifeforce had covered the floor. Revan proceeded to reach what appeared the docking bay as he looked over the "ships" that were there waiting to be used. Revan picked the black shell like ship in the middle. Once Revan entered the ship he had another flashback as he remembered a time when he was back at the Ebon Hawk with Bastitla,HK47, and Canderous and he felt happy to be with those people then the next instant Revan sees them dead with Hk47 spread apart in parts then Revan sees THEM coming for him as they step over and through the comrades. When Revan woke up he discovered he was already in space as he heard the ship speak to him.
"Where do you wish to go my Master"?
Who said that? Revan asked
I did My Master" the ship replied"
Who are you" Revan asked
I have no name I am simply a servant
Then Take me to Korriban"Revan commaned to the ship
Yes My Master" as the ship headed to Korriban from Uknown space and as the trip was long revan went back to sleep as this team he had a vision of what the Universe went through as he went away to find the Sith. He saw the exile, he saw the sith that was under his command tear each other apart, Darth Bane ensuring the Sith survival by making it only two at a time. Then he saw how Palptine had wiped out the Jedi with the help of the "chosen" one Anakin Skywalker who becomes Darth Vader then Luke Skywalker restarting the Jedi Order after the Defeat of Vader and Palptine. Then he saw the one thing that got his blood boil as he saw the Sith enter space again but calling themselves the Yuuzhan Vong.
After Revan saw that he had woken up his body drenched in sweat. Sensing Revan would overheat the ship took revan to Korribean's surface and allowed him out so Revan could breath fresh air.
Revan freed from the ship and the Sith/Vong he was on his hands and knees in a postion of worship. Revan looks up as he remembers Korriban as the memories flood back as the dead used Revan as a vessel for him to know what had happened since he has been gone. It was an hour before Revan could comprehend all the information he gained since his arrival at Korriban. Revan rises up to see his old friend TE M40 moving slowly out of one of the temples.
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Darth Tygr
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its ok to respond if anything I strongly recomend the reader to say if they like the story or not it helps when I decide to do the next chapters
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Devrin
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I on't really understand how all of this happened. If you could explain how Revan got there and how he's been asleep for over 5,000 years would be a big help.
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Darth Tygr
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well either I could tell you now or you could wait to read other chapters when I explain everything but for a quick answer when he searched in unkown space he was captured and placed in a force crystal(possibly like the star forge) and he has been asleep since then almost the same concept that sith was stuck in the temple of Yavin 4 but Revan kepted his body
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Devrin
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(I shall wait for more chapters to unfold and then I shall judge it.....good story for now though  )
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Xander Vos
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A few flaws:
- How can Revan "sleep" for 5,000 years? A Force Crystal is kind of a lame excuse and would draw away from his supposed enormous power.
- How can he just "remember" all the events that take place since then while he "dreams"?
- Why is he still able to command people to do as he says? Why would they obey him? How would they know who he is?
I recommend space your paragraphs to make it easier to read, and also work on your grammar and descriptive techniques.
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Devrin
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Those are points that I tried to find out Xander
I also highly doubt that Revan's memories just came back to him along with his powers.
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Lord Vexen
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He probably takes that from KOTOR honost mistake, I think.
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Devrin
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Most likely
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Darth Tygr
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| Quote: | How can Revan "sleep" for 5,000 years? A Force Crystal is kind of a lame excuse and would draw away from his supposed enormous power.
- How can he just "remember" all the events that take place since then while he "dreams"?
- Why is he still able to command people to do as he says? Why would they obey him? How would they know who he is?
I recommend space your paragraphs to make it easier to read, and also work on your grammar and descriptive techniques
well as I said to the other person you could have me tell you all the details now or or you could wait and read the chapters to find off but I be happy to take the idea of spacing and attempt for grammer corrections cant promise I succeed
anyway the easiest way to answer your question is I just given glimpese on his power and persaude my mistake not say everything to save some for later and he only met one person since he came back and that was the droid everything else was memory |
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Darth Tygr
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Chapter 2 of the return of Revan
Standing there frozen as after all these Revan sees an old friend of T5 M40 coming toward him. "So I am not the only person to survive allthese years" Revan remarked as the droid came closer. {T5M40 replies on screen} it appears so Revan I and HK47 have been waiting faithfully for your return as we tried using your followers to find you Lord Revan.
HK47 is still around(Revans asks in curiousity)......(T5M40 responds) well as you know he was very content to going on a killing spree so I had to shock and dismember him again to ensure that he would be servicable for you Lord Revan.
Revan and T5-M40 walk to the former academy as T5-m40 explains how Korriban was the safest place to hide the Ebon Hawk for repairs and reconstruction. When they finally reach the landing area revan saw how the Ebon Hawk was in pieces as the entire landing was covered in metals, wiring, and other parts
This must have taken you years to take apart the Ebon Hawk(Revan stated to T5-M40) {T5-M40} It was Lord Revan which was why I had to have HK47 help me I do think he needs some corrections on his memory core it seem that has been more corrupted than any damage he received through battle
For the next few days Revan and T5-M40 go through all the parts trying to see what has endured and what needs to be replaced. "Not enough to completly rebuild the Eban Hawk which means we are stuck here on Korriban. What about that black ship I saw you come in what is wrong with that ship{T5-M40} asked. The mention of the black ship sends Revan through another flash back but a rapid one and since he is still regaining his powers the flashbacks overcome him to he collaspses as T5_M40 sighs to see Revan in pain
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Xander Vos
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It is established fact that HK was destroyed, and T3 went off with Revan so they would already have been together.
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Darth Tygr
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Chapter3
Jacen Solo(dont know his sith name so for now he will be known as Jacen Solo for those critics) wakes up as he felt another force user in the universe and this was different because this one had the taint of the of the Vong like he was. Jacen thought it be impossible for that to happen because he knew any and all jedi that have been in contact with the Vong. Jacen goes into a meditation searching for that Force touch with a mix of Vong but this particular sensation was gone almost like he could hide his presence like Jacen could.
Revan wakes up feeling weaker as he feels drained from the use of the Force. feels that excessive energy he got from that prison nearly gown as he feels time catching up with himself. T5-M40 rolls up to Revan
T5-M40) Lord Raven I had used the money that you gained when the Jedi wiped your memory and invested it over and over and I used that money to send supplies to Korriban they should be here anyday now.
T5-M40 stood there silently as he watched Revan leaning against a wall almost appears dead till Revan wakes up and gasps.
Thank you you been a good friend and servant(Revan gasped in breaths saying). T5 fetches a sled as it picks Revan as they head toward one of the Temples. T5 worries over the result of the apperance of Revan and how weak he is. Once revan is placed at the base of the Sith Temple T5 goes back to the disembled Ebon Hawk is in fixing some of the things.
One of the things T5 was doing was refixing HK47. T5 seperated the memory core and the essential computer stuff as he created a new shell for HK 47. Using all the tools that Boa Dour had and using parts[size=18] Goto's body.
When T5 finishes rebuilding Hk47 he observes his handy work as this new Hk47 is black instead of rusty red there are weapons inside his arms and legs. T5 hears a beep as that shipment of different stuff[ that he had ordered for the ship to help Lord revan. T5 goes to the area for the ship landing as the ship lands and a representive of the company comes toward T5.
{T5=40} I represent my master he is not feeling well I will accept shipment from you.
Since they were already paid they just needed to hand off the paperwork and they be done the workers helped deliver the droids and other technology sent to the Academy building. Once T5 gave the codes the 50 droids were in his control as they begin rebuilding the Ebon Hawk. Once shipment was gone T5 watched the ship fly away.
as the droids were rebuilding the Ebon Hawk T5 was going through Hk47's meomory banks and protocols and doing it from scratch. It was tedious work but once T5 was done Hk47's memory will not malfunction again as T5 downloads the new programing into HK47/size]
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Sephiroth
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When was HK destroyed? 
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Lord Vexen
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SWG the Musafar one.
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Sephiroth
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Well that sucks hard.
Everyone dies in SWG. 
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Darth Tygr
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Chapter4
The power cell was activated as the programing for HK47 was checking and double checking to ensure that there be no virues to corrupt Hk47 till finally the red lights(they replaced the orange ones FYI) came online
(statement) where am I........I feel strange it feels like I am not in my body........gasp..............what happened I am..............BLACK why am I black did someone not like me as the rusty red color that I was since my creation or am I in trouble and I am disguise........the last I remember I was with T5-M40 and we were looking for our Master revan.......meatbag but still I am devoted to that meatbag and now I am turned black but at least this appears I have a new body.
(T5 rolls in as he checks in on HK47)
(T5-40) its good the reconstruction was successful you are needed immediately HK47
(HK47statement) and what makes you think I will follow you you little astroid droid even the fragmented memory core I had I did remember you zapped me simply because I asked a few questions about the ship during my amesia period and then I discover after we found that exile person I WAS STILL destroyed so what do you have to offer that would make me help you
{T5-40) if you come with me I am sure you can shoot the meatbags that is coming and show them why you are the most dangerous assasian droid in the universe
(gleefullly happy HK47) well why didnt you say that in the first place. as Hk47 gets up and gets the mandolorian repeating gun and follows T5 outside the former academy's walls
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Xander Vos
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Jacen is no where near powerful enough to sense one more FS in the Galaxy. That's preposterous considering the thousands of lives coming into existence every second, of which perhaps one percent, in other words, a few tens of children, being Force Sensitive.
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Darth Tygr
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Chapter 5
Revan woke up startled as he was sleeping and had another dream of what the Sith/Vong did to him while he was prisoner in the Unkown Space. His body was drenched with sweat as he pulled his mask off him as the cold air of the Sith Temple he was in blows on him cooling him off.
(Statement) Master you finally woke up we were worried you had died since you were unconscious for seven days HK47 asked raven. Raven turned to see HK47....."Oh HK47 I didnt see you, while I been unconsciousness I slowly reconnected with the Force and the Force has sounded like a thousand voices talking and it seemed half of the voices I heard were dead and the other people were people I have never met."{statement} Master why did you leave us the first time did I not do what you wanted did I fail you kill any of those annoying meatbags?"...No Hk47 I left because when I saw the Unknown space I saw the Sith and I learned from them but I had to stop them because either it was the seperation for such a long time from known space that if they were allowed to enter known space they would have conquered space and some of those ways they had to accomplish things have to be stopped or known space would be doomed." {statement} Well Master while you were asleep I and TI M40 were able to hack into some computer systems and was to discover a few things these Sith you mentioned are now calling themselves Yuzzhung Vong and they created severe damage and it seemed they were compensating because some fifty years ago or hundreded they were stripped of the force somehow and they decided to use "organice weaponary" to fight the known galaxary. The Vong who survived or surrendered to the "galatic alliance" stayed on the planet that was strong with the Force called Zonama Sekot. Now the threat now is the battle against Corellia against the rest of the Republic and if I may suggest Corellia would be a good ally to have if you wish to rule the galaxy again master Hk47 said but Revan was distracted as he saw a figure coming from the entrance of the temple they were in as the figure came close the figure spoke" My name is Lumiya and I think we could benefit if we joined forces" as Revan pondered the possiblities with this stranger as he could sense this person had some forcee sensitivity.
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