Childhood

Adenn · Childhood

Editing in progress...

Kisuk Kolar

It seemed kind of too Earthly with just a few starwars terms

Adenn

Oh yeah. I can't think straight at night.Sorry about that.

Darth Kor

I agree with Matas. Make it more starwarsy. (if that is even a word Question

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Adenn

Tomer Rossin's Journal/Datapad Entry:

1/6/007

Steve and mother that day acted strange and wierd. I hadn't thought about until after the"attack" of the mother bantha. They had this flash in my eyes when they headed up the ramp. It was as if they wanted to leave me on this planet. Leave me forever until I never existed in their life. What had I done wrong? Maybe I never should have trusted Steve. I loved him, but I guess I was too late to realize what would happen. That day was a day I wanted to forget. Mom. I missed her. I know she wouldn't do that, but why did she have that excited look in her eyes? Why did she seem so eager she went on slowly? Steve. That's the answer. He did something to her. That's why I hunted him down after that incident. I would remove him from my life and memory.

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I quickly got out it's way before it ran over me. Too late. My leg was in the open and it's foot stomped on it. I sucked in a hard breath to contain my scream of pain.

"Ib'tuur jatne tuur ash'ad kyr'amur!"(Today is a good day for some other bugger to die!), I shouted.

I quickly and desperatly grabbed for my weapon, only to be stopped my another roar of anger. I looked around to see the bantha charging again. I put my hands in front of me, waiting for my death. To admit it, I was scared. Frightened. Then, I felt something surge through me. Then I heard a howl of agony and pain. I looked up and saw the bantha, somehow pushed hard against a rock, blood dripping from it's back. I looked at my hands, then at the bantha. I then layed down on the sand, exhausted from what just happend. I felt like my energy was used up, that I used a power that consumed my strength.Then, I slowy closed my eyes, drifting to sleep...
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"Hey kid, wake up. Hey, wake up!", a voice called.

"Wha-wha-what?", I said.

I heard music as I woke up, and alot of noise.

"Whe-where am I?, I questioned.

"Hey, take it easy. Your leg is all swollen up. Move any more and you're gonna regret it", the man said.

"Where am I?", I repeated

"Well, to be,well, more casual...you're in a cantina.", he replied.

"What!?", I shouted.

"Hey kid, shush. You don't want me to get in trouble, do you?", he said harshly.

"Why in the republic's name did you bring me here?!", I said.

"Hey, you better thank me. I had to save you before you got poked around by jawas. Plus, I had to drag you to my landspeeder, wrap you up, lie that it's just an insrument I brought, and now you shout out. Yeah, your welcome.And I suggest you lie down and be quiet before we're bantha fodder.", he threatened.

"I understand that, but why the heck did you go to a cantina? Why not somewhere else? We would be safer.", I whispered.

"Kid, look around you. What does it look like I do.", I got up and looked around the table. The bar I was sitting at didn't feel so comfy with the wrapping. As I looked around, I could see other aliens. They were playing a sabacc card game.

"Hey kid, pass me that drink.", a snivvian grunted.

Some welcoming community., I thought as I passed the drink down to him.

"So you brought me here with you just because you wanted money. Let me guess:You betted on me and if you lose I would be a slave to one of them.", I guessed, glancing at the remaining players.

"Yeah. Good guess.", he grunted as he peered over his cards. Then he smiled and brought the cards down.

"Oh yeah! Looks like I won this time!", he shouted.

I looked over his shoulder and saw his cards. Whoa!, I thought. That was the best hand I've ever seen!

"You got lucky this time, Pheno. But next time, you won't be so lucky.", a twi'lek said.

Then all 3 players went away from the table and dissapeared behind the door.

"Freaks.", I said.

"You think?", the man said.

"Yeah. Anyways, what's your name?", I asked.

"Not if you tell me your first.", he said.

"Fine. my name's Tomer. But call me Tom. I don't like Tomer that much.", I replied.

"Heh. Nice to meet you Tomer. My name is Carso Pheno. C'mon, lets get out of here before everyone notices you.", you said hurringly.

He then carried me on his back, covering my head, and we got outside. But we didn't expect what was going to be out the door.
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"Pheno, you cheated. We saw those cards under your sleeve.", a voice called.

I struggled out of the wrapping, and fell out with a thud. I stood up, and now that I could see in the daylight, I saw what Carso looked like. He had straight brown hair, green eyes, and a pilot suit on.

"I don't know what you're talking about fur-face", Carso firmly said.

The snivvian let out a snort, and took a battle stance, indicating he wanted a fight. I looked his way, and saw that he was accompanied by a twi'lek, the one from before. He also waited for a fight.

"Ok, ok. I'm sure we can work this out...", Carso said.

But it was too late. The snivvian charged at us with his fist getting ready to punch.My leg throbbed, and I couldn't do anything. Carso ducked out of the way, but he forgot about me.

"Get out of the way you knuckle-headed kid!", he shouted.

But it was too late, he was closing in on me. But then, the most extraordinary thing happend.
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It's alot of talking, but I don't think my imagination is working with me. Smile

P.S.: Don't worry, as the story progresses, I'll try to make it "starwarsy".

Adenn

Tomer Rossin's Journal/Datapad Entry:

1/7/007

The fight with the snivvian was one of the most extraordinary battles ever to happen to me. I could use these...powers. I could heal my leg faster than usual, I could speed up my attacks, and one of my favorites:I could push people far away without even touching them. But everything has its limits. For this power, it cost me my energy, and when it costs me energy, I get tired in battle. And if I get tired, my effectiveness in battle decreases, until I die. This power...I never felt anything like it. It's almost like using...The Force. That name gave me a surprise that day. I was so shocked...me, a force sensitive? I never imagined it.

The same energy surged through me, this time it went to my leg. My leg felt stronger, and I was able to jump out of the way before the fist landed in my face. The twil'ek was busy fighting Carso, and that left me with the snivvian.

Great., I thought.Carson gets a twil'ek while I have to deal with fur-face here. How better can he get?

"Very impressive Carson. You got a kid with guts. Too bad this nerf-herder will be dead soon.", he snorted.

Nerf-herder? NERF-HERDER!, I thought angrily.

"I'll show you whos a nerf-herder!", I said as I charged at him.

He simply step-sided me, and I tripped over his toe he stuck out and I hit the ground head-first.

"Tom!", Carson shouted. He rushed toward my aid, only to be stopped by the twil'ek who grabbed his shoulder.

"Where do you think you're going?", the twi'lek said. Then he pulled Carson towards him and he punched him in the face. Carson let out a low whoosh.

"Why don't you just use blasters?", I spat.

"We would, but we want you to suffer!", growled the snivvian.

He walked over to me and picked me up by the hair.

"Now, look at your friend.", he said, smiling.

Carson was laying on the ground, unconcious.

"What are you going to do to him?", I asked nervously.

The twi'lek pulled out a blaster and pointed it at Carson. My eyes widened with horror.

"No! Don't kill him!", I pleaded.

"Why do you care! He saved you because he wanted to play the stupid card game and used you as a bet! You should be glad we're killing him!", the snivvian bellowed. The twi'lek then pointed the trigger at his body. Then, he slowly pulled the trigger.
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"Noo!!!!!!", I shouted.

Then, I shot my hands in front of me and twi'lek was pushed against the wall of the alley. I growled and bit the snivvian's arm.

"Hey, ow!", he shouted and let go of my hair.

The snivvian then retreated to the twi'lek, still dazed from the attack, and picked him up.

"We're out of here!", he shouted.

"No...", I said. I felt a power surge into me again.

"You will never leave. You will never be forgiven for hurting him...", I said menacingly.

I felt anger, and I felt the power inside surge harder. I felt hard power. I pulled back my arm and the two were pulled back and pinned against the wall. I smiled a wicked smile, and took the blaster dropped on the ground.

"Ok ok kid...we can work this out. I'll let you have all my credits, I'll even let you keep the twi'lek and let him suffer, but please, don't kill me!", he shouted pleadingly.

"Nooo...you should be punished...with death", I whispered in his ear.

Then I backed up, pointed at the snivvian, and pulled the trigger, fired on both of them. A scream followed after that. A scream of pain. A scream of death.

I know these are short but bear with me.

Adenn

Tomer Rossin's Journal/Datapad Entry:

1/8/007

I never thought I would feel so much power. I could feel it surging through me as if, as if...I was a rancor. A rancor that could destroy all his enemies in one swipe. The Force is something I experimented on ever since that day. I lifted debris, mind tricked people (now that was fun!), and even helped people who needed healing. Little did I know what would happen because of these actions.

Ok ok...I have to go to bed later on and I can't do the whole thing so expect it tommorow. I'll edit this.

Xander Vos

I just don't think Steve is a Star Wars name. Its too much like a real story that you've editted slightly to make it more like Star Wars.

Adenn

Like I said, I don't think my imagination is working with me. I'll try something else.